Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review

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The peer review department of the Biography WikiProject conducts peer review of articles on request. The primary objective is to encourage better articles by having contributors who may not have worked on articles to examine them and provide ideas for further improvement.

The peer review process is highly flexible and can deal with articles of any quality. The process is intended to make both marginal and good quality articles into excellent, encyclopedic ones. However, use of a peer review for articles assessed below the Biography WikiProject's B-Class may not be a good use of reviewers' time.

Editors with article requests involving significant policy and/or POV concerns or edit wars should use Wikipedia:Third opinion, Wikipedia:Requests for comment, and/or Noticeboards (Wikipedia:Biographies of living persons/Noticeboard for living persons and Wikipedia:Administrators'_noticeboard/Incidents for others.) before a peer review.

All reviews are conducted by fellow editors—usually members of the Biography WikiProject. Please consider reviewing someone else's article too, if you request yours :-)

Contents 1 Instructions 1.1 Requesting a review 1.2 Responding to a request 1.3 Archiving 2 Requests 2.1 Clara Elsene Peck 2.2 Harry Lewiston 2.3 Mary C. Seward 2.4 Charlie Soong 2.5 Hussain Muhammad Ershad 2.6 Igor Panarin 2.7 Will to Power (band) 2.8 Military career of L. Ron Hubbard 2.9 David Robinson (horticulturist) 2.10 Joe Jackson 2.11 Richard Pace (Jamestown) 2.12 Harold Pinter 2.13 Wangari Maathai 2.13.1 Review by Hekerui 2.14 Umar Israilov 2.15 Susan Boyle 2.16 John Mitchell (football coach) 2.16.1 Review by Jezhotwells 2.17 Colleen Howe 2.17.1 Review by JiggleJog 2.18 Florence Shapiro 2.18.1 Review by Hekerui 2.19 Robert Ford (politician) 2.20 John Edward 2.21 Mario Ančić 2.21.1 Review by GregorB 2.22 Tess Gerritsen 2.22.1 Review by Mae Sendikson 2.23 Pope John Paul II 2.24 Christa McAuliffe 2.25 Jada Pinkett Smith 2.26 Pin Malakul 2.27 John Pitcairn, Jr. 2.28 Dwight Lauderdale 2.29 Ramakrishna 3 Archives

[edit] Instructions

[edit] Requesting a review

1. Add peer-review=yes to the {{WPBiography}} project banner at the top of the article's talk page (see the project banner instructions for more details on the exact syntax).
2. From there, click on the "request has been made" link that appears in the template. This will open a page to discuss the review of your article.
3. Place === [[Name of nominated article]] === at the top.
4. Below it, write what you hope to gain from a peer review. For example, what are you aiming for with this article? Do you hope it can become a Featured Article? Good Article? Or something else? Remember to sign your post with four tildes (~~~~).
5. Add {{Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Name of nominated article}} at the top of the list of requests on this page.
6. Add a link to your article to the beginning of the Peer Review announcement list.
7. The peer review volunteers interested in your subject area welcome direct requests. Simply leave a message on their user talk page inviting them to comment on your article.

[edit] Responding to a request

Everyone is encouraged to comment on any request listed here. To comment on an article, please add a new section (using ==== Review by [[User:Your name|Your name]] ====) for your comments, in order to keep multiple responses legible.

[edit] Archiving

Reviews should be archived after they have been inactive for some time, or when the article is nominated as a featured article candidate. To archive a review:

1. Replace peer-review=yes with old-peer-review=yes in the {{WPBiography}} project banner template at the top of the article's talk page
2. Move {{Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Name of nominated article}} from this page to the current archive page.
3. Remove article from Peer review announcement list

[edit] Requests

[edit] Clara Elsene Peck

I worked this article up to what I feel is a decent Wikipedia quality and would eventually like to see it get a GA rating. Any input and improvements to the article happily appreciated.--Scott Free (talk) 22:33, 28 June 2009 (UTC)

[edit] Harry Lewiston

This is my first biography, and I am hoping to have this assessed as a Good Article. I have done a good deal of research about the subject and tried to keep the tone neutral and factual. Full disclosure - Harry Lewiston was my great-uncle and I wanted to ensure that he was not lost to history. I welcome your suggestions and feedback. 48states (talk) 19:24, 22 June 2009 (UTC)

[edit] Mary C. Seward

Would like to see this article achieve A-class as representative of the many people whose work or accomplishments have been cited and/or endured enough to warrant a basic on-line entry, but usually not notable enough to make the cut in printed form or as a Featured Article. Thanks in advance for any comments or other feedback. Rostdo (talk) 18:33, 9 June 2009 (UTC)

[edit] Charlie Soong

I just finished a complete rewrite and restructuring of this article, and I'm aiming for Good Article status. There are a few problems that I would like to acknowledge first. First, the birthdate is a contested issue, and I felt that it was most accurate to include the range of years in which he is thought to have been born. The best thing would be to have a section on why there are multiple dates on record and what they are. Second, the sources about Charlie Soong are scarce to say the least, and all of my information comes from one book. I have cited the different pages on which each section is discussed. Any feedback on the article would be greatly appreciated, as this is my first fairly large contribution to wikipedia. My goal is to clean up and rewrite all the articles relating to the Soong family. Hugi (talk) 19:31, 31 May 2009 (UTC)

[edit] Hussain Muhammad Ershad

The article has gone through an extensive expansion backed by cited materials since it recieved a B class rating. I am hoping for at least a Good Article status.--GetItRight82 (talk) 05:27, 29 May 2009 (UTC)

[edit] Igor Panarin

Aimed to hopefully become a Featured Article. As the maintainer is a Bulgarian, some phrases may not "sound" natural to a native English speaker. Some copy-editing by native English speakers has already been done but it's probably still imperfect. If you know Russian, if would be helpful as most of the sources are in Russian. But the main thing is not the language, of course, it's the content and organisation of the article. Your helpful suggestions for improving it to reach the level necessary for a Featured Article nomination will be greatly appreciated. Thank you for reviewing it! --Лъчезар (talk) 12:32, 16 May 2009 (UTC)

[edit] Will to Power (band)

I'm hoping for some constructive criticism about the state of the article now. I attempted to overhaul the content (which led to a whole bunch of drama, starting at EAR and progressing to ANI), trying to make it chronological, unbiased and well-referenced, but I'm too involved in this to see if I've succeeded in anything. Please compare it to the version which existed before a few weeks ago to get the gist of what I tried to do. Any input is welcome, thanks. Zephyrnthesky (talk) 19:04, 14 May 2009 (UTC)

[edit] Military career of L. Ron Hubbard

I have completely rewritten this article from scratch following concerns that the previous version - not written by me, I hasten to add - was excessively POV and based on original research. (Compare before and after.) The replacement article documents the military career of L. Ron Hubbard, who served in the US Navy from 1941-45 (active service) and 1945-50 (reserves). I would like to get it up to at least GA standard and preferably FA standard, and would appreciate feedback on the current text. I've avoided, wherever possible, quoting from primary sources but I should say up front that there are some primary source quotations simply to meet the demands of NPOV - the account would be extremely one-sided if Hubbard's own POV could not be quoted. The article will need to be re-rated as well. -- ChrisO (talk) 07:52, 14 May 2009 (UTC)

Note that there is a parallel peer review ongoing at http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:WikiProject_Military_history/Peer_review/Military_career_of_L._Ron_Hubbard – I think it would be best to keep discussion in one place. JN466 08:52, 23 May 2009 (UTC)

[edit] David Robinson (horticulturist)

I have written this entry about my Father-In-Law and would like to make it into a proper encyclopaedia type entry. As this was my first, I am looking for pointers as to how I can improve it over all. I would love it to be so good as to become a Featured Article. Atellyer (talk) 20:20, 12 May 2009 (UTC)

[edit] Joe Jackson

This article has recently been much expanded, with associated articles (particularly the linked albums now referenced and wikilinked etc.) Looking towards a possible assessment as Good article status. If not, a critique might push me, and hopefully others, in the right direction. Thank you,

Derek R Bullamore (talk) 22:48, 10 May 2009 (UTC)

[edit] Richard Pace (Jamestown)

Does this article pass muster for Biography WikiProject? Comments, suggestions, and improvements more than welcome. This is my first from-scratch Wikipedia article, so please let me know if I'm not following proper protocol here. Glen Mark Martin (talk) 16:29, 8 May 2009 (UTC)

[edit] Harold Pinter

I welcome review of this article, particularly concerning its length, detail, referencing style, prose and accessibility for Wikipedia readers. It would be good to get direction on ways to take it forward to featured artcile status. There has been disagreement amongst editors on the general style and tone of the article - in particular one editor's resistance to improvements suggested by others. Jezhotwells (talk) 22:17, 5 May 2009 (UTC)

[edit] Wangari Maathai

I've recently significantly expanded the article, primarily through the use of her autobiography Unbowed. I have attempted to add various other references throughout at the more possibly contentious points, as of course her autobiography will reflect on her more favorably. I'm hoping to bring this article to GA status soon, and then hopefully to continue towards FA. As biographies aren't necessarily my forte, I was hoping for some assistance from the Wikiproject to further improve the article. -- PEPSI2786^talk 06:27, 3 May 2009 (UTC)

[edit] Review by Hekerui

A few quick points on style:

• Headings shouldn't start with "the", per WP:HEAD
• For an article of this length, the lead can be expanded to summarize the article better.
• Some dates should be delinked per MOS:UNLINKDATES.
• Footnotes should directly follow the text with no space (there are some that don't).
• A picture that doesn't fill out the infobox width of 225px can be scaled to its natural size (here 175px).
• "February 28th, 1992" should be "February 28, 1992".
• I think the long quotes in "Controversy" subsection can be summarized.
• Typos:

  "womens rights" to "women's rights"

  "colocated" to "collocated"

  "it's focus on the environment" to "its focus on the environment"

  "minitstyr" to "ministry"

  "a bogus organization and it's members" to "a bogus organization and its members"

  "hte case was thrown out" to "the case was thrown out"

  "the governments response" to "the government's response"

  "beseiged" to "besieged"

  "across from Uhuru park" to "across from Uhuru Park"

Hekerui (talk) 10:55, 3 May 2009 (UTC)

I've gone through and corrected most of the issues you've mentioned, adding a to the one's I have done. Thanks for the help. -- PEPSI2786^talk 17:41, 3 May 2009 (UTC)

[edit] Umar Israilov

This is a short article about a Chechen soldier who accused government leaders of human rights violations, and whose death in Austria is a subject of controversy between supporters and opponents of the current Russian-allied Chechen regime. I edited the article to deal with what I saw as tendentious quoting of Chechen officials. I am also concerned with the quality of some Russian-language sources and the authenticity of material on the "Caucasian Knot" website. I hope this is an appropriate way to request input from other editors. I do not think this will ever be a GA or FA, as the subject is not a historically prominent figure. What is needed from this article is a neutral account of Umar Israilov's short life and the little that is known about his death. — ℜob C. alias ᴀʟᴀʀoʙ 17:09, 21 April 2009 (UTC)

• Not sure myself whether Aliyev's blog qualifies as a reliable source. Otherwise, the article looks relatively good, although I would like a bit more detail of his early life if such information is available. John Carter (talk) 17:02, 30 April 2009 (UTC)

• I've removed that reference before, with the same concern, but another editor restored it. I'm also concerned about the authenticity of an alleged interview with a British journalist; that too was restored without responding to my concerns. I'm stepping back to avoid edit war. — ℜob C. alias ᴀʟᴀʀoʙ 17:30, 30 April 2009 (UTC)

[edit] Susan Boyle

Requesting review of article as has already attracted favourable attention and news coverage from The Washington Post. It would be good to encourage editors by showing what is possible on Wikipedia in a short time. Would like to review to A-Class. SunCreator (talk) 04:39, 21 April 2009 (UTC)

I could probably round up a couple of editors to look at this article. It's exceptional work for such a short time. But you should put it up for GA first. That's the usual order of things, and GA has more active reviewers that can give you pointers on how to improve the article. -Duribald (talk) 11:36, 21 April 2009 (UTC)

• As Duribald mentions, GA comes before A-class. Now, even though I have commented and edited this topic, I'll mention one thing. The article has indeed come a long way in a short time; but, it is in no way ready for a GA review. Stability alone would would cause the article to fail. That's not meant to offend any editor, but until the issues of: 1.) her birth date, 2.) Nationality British vs. Scottish, 3.)the WP:EL issues are resolved, the YouTube links - are all resolved, the article won't pass muster. This isn't to say that the article is bad, just to say that it does not meet the criteria of GA on the stability issue alone. (Wikipedia:Good article criteria). SunCreator, you've done some marvelous work with the Boyle article, but until the rapidity of editing dies down, it's going to be very difficult to get a good article assessment done on this. Patience. ;) — Ched :  ?  14:05, 21 April 2009 (UTC)
• Good work so far, but I agree, this is quite unstable at the moment and unlike the articles on, say, Barack Obama and John McCain, there is no semi-protection keeping it stable. Hekerui (talk) 17:39, 21 April 2009 (UTC)
• Agreed with the above, wait until after the media frenzy on her performance dies down a bit before adding. And personally, I wouldn't nominate an article without any pictures. I hope those going to her semi final performance have their cameras with them... 78.133.77.127 (talk) 20:07, 21 April 2009 (UTC)

• Pictures do not matter. The main problem with the article are the Youtube links and lack of some information - and others used too much. (ie. Someone cannot be "48-49" years old, you are either 48 or 49.) Stability is a big problem before, as many articles have been denied solely on the stability issue. --haha169 (talk) 03:26, 22 April 2009 (UTC)

• Picture matters but only a little.
• No issue with youtube links because there are none in this article and hasn't been for some days. Unless you think it's an issue there is no link?
• The Date of Birth is a problem, but not one that has a solution at this point.
• Stability is not such an issue as you might imagine - but still a minor one. Most of the edits are adding something and then reverted. Edits affecting the display of the article yesterday amounted to moving some commas, changing tense and adding some references. Vandalism and good faith improvements(adding picture, dob, american spelling etc which is later reverted) are quite within acceptability. See here. SunCreator (talk) 12:50, 22 April 2009 (UTC)

• • Well, I guess the bottom line is: it's really going to come down to "who" does the review. I can't imagine there would be any shortage of takers on that one. ;) Best of luck — Ched :  ?  14:18, 22 April 2009 (UTC)

I hadn't realized the youtube links were gone for so long. Sorry about that. --haha169 (talk) 04:43, 24 April 2009 (UTC)

[edit] John Mitchell (football coach)

I would like to solicit opinions on whether this article meets the requirements of a Good Article. If not, please let me know how it needs to be improved. The only major GA criteria that I know it does not meet is an image....if anyone has an image for this article, please let me know. -- Deejayk (talk) 17:49, 18 March 2009 (UTC)

[edit] Review by Jezhotwells

It is not neccessary for an article to have an image to pass GA, although it is good if it has one. Have you checked out WP:Finding images tutorial for some tips on finding an image? If that fails you could post at WP:Requested pictures. If you can not find an image it is best to remove the image placeholder as its use is discouraged as is shown at WP:Centralized discussion/Image placeholders.

A brief glance at the article shows that it is well organised and referenced. I did not check out the references.

The lead needs expanding from one sentence. Check out WP:Lead section for some tips. I would suggest that it is near GA standard.

You could list it at WP:GAN and carry on working on it, as it will take a while for it to reach top of the list. Jezhotwells (talk) 10:31, 12 May 2009 (UTC)

[edit] Colleen Howe

I've listed this article for peer review because…Colleen Howe sadly passed away recently and the article will probably be viewed quite a lot by the WWW, and it should be ship shape - as one of Wikipedia's finer works. Kind regards and thank you SriMesh | talk 02:34, 8 March 2009 (UTC)

• Note: A general PR was opened here as well. §hep^Talk 04:10, 8 March 2009 (UTC)

[edit] Review by JiggleJog

Apparently you listed your desire for a review in both "biography peer review" and "general peer review". I reviewed your article over here. But I am still working on it—that is, copyediting the darned thing. Finding a good copyeditor before you request a peer review is always a good procedure. This allows your reviewers to read your article without constant interruptions like missing commas or spelling, or absolute confusion. JiggleJog (talk) 15:04, 13 March 2009 (UTC)

[edit] Florence Shapiro

As an important figure in the Texas State Senate and a potential US Senator, the page should reflect her contributions and relative importance. I am hoping to achieve a GA or B Article in the near future. --Longhornsg (talk) 23:11, 25 February 2009 (UTC)

[edit] Review by Hekerui

I have cleaned up the article quite a bit, added some content and sources and added Fact tags where necessary. The article definitely requires work to become a B Class article. References should be added to source the existing material and the article should be expanded, especially with regard to Shapiro's work in the senate. If possible, a picture of her should be added. Also, when the article has more content the lead should be rewritten to provide an appropriate overview of the article. I assessed the article to Start Class and changed the importance rating in WikiProject Texas to "Mid" in accordance with the criteria set forth on its assessment page. Best wishes Hekerui (talk) 11:14, 26 February 2009 (UTC)

[edit] Robert Ford (politician)

Hi! I would like to get advice on whether the names of the sections are good and whether the section "Political positions" reads well - and article as a whole. The article is rated B Class and the goal is GA Class. Thank you! Hekerui (talk) 00:04, 19 February 2009 (UTC)

It passed GA, but I'm still not sure about "Political positions" lol If anyone wants to comment, thank you. Hekerui (talk) 00:38, 13 March 2009 (UTC)

[edit] John Edward

This article has recently been "tag warred" over alleged POV and neutrality issues; also, the first peer review is more than two years old. Any constructive criticism from someone outside the argument is greatly appreciated. Willbyr (talk | contribs) 13:46, 17 February 2009 (UTC)

[edit] Mario Ančić

I expanded and added sources into the article. I'm hoping GA? I'm sure there are maybe some spelling errors, because English is not my native language. So if there are someone who can help me with that. Can someone give me some pointers on what else must I do. --Göran S (talk) 17:41, 14 February 2009 (UTC)

[edit] Review by GregorB

I'm not a member of WikiProject Biography, but I'm going to try my hand here as a member of WikiProject Croatia. Further reviews are more than welcome, of course.

References

The article is well-referenced, using inline citations. Still, it could use a couple more throughout the tennis career section, particularly in the playing style section, which is completely unreferenced.

Coverage and accuracy

Ančić's tennis career is chronologically described in detail. Is it too detailed? Reading the article, I never had the feeling it went into unnecessary detail or trivia. (For a perspective on cruftiness, see Ian Thorpe - an FA-class, no less.) I could not find any inaccuracies or outdated information. Some pieces of information are missing, e.g. it is not clear who coached Mario before 2005. Personal life info is also a bit scarce; more about it later.

Structure and supporting materials

In terms of structure and supporting materials, the article is on par with Leander Paes, a GA-class tennis biography described as "an example of ideal page structure". Everything's there.

Grammar and style

Needs a copyedit: grammar and style mostly. Some copyedit work has already been done. In this department, I'll defer to native speakers.

Final remarks

I believe that the article is a real GA-class candidate. Once it is copyedited, I don't see a major obstacle.

What I feel is missing from the article is an outside perspective - what other people say about Ančić? What does he say about himself? For example in this interview (Croatian) we learn that he has never lit a cigarette in his life, his motto is that enduring is more important than hoping, and that the secret of his success is 80% perseverance and work, 20% talent. Granted, these are factoids (self-reported too), but they could make the biography more rounded provided there's a way to incorporate them into the article. GregorB (talk) 15:25, 1 March 2009 (UTC)

[edit] Tess Gerritsen

I have started expanding and sourcing the article, and have managed to receive a publicity photo from the subject. I know it is missing any substantial criticisms, but I haven't been able to find any. I hope mainly to get the prose looked at, fresh set of eyes will be great. » \ / (⁂ | ※) 02:10, 25 January 2009 (UTC)

[edit] Review by Mae Sendikson

Generally, I had little difficulty with the prose--though a good copy-editor from time to time will be a pleasant addition. Find one with whom you can work. My first reaction to the article was your Lead--or, specifically, the lack of one, that is. I was well into the Thrillers section before I realized how notable Gerritsen is. I understand that you are expanding so I suggest that you read the PJ Haarsma review below (and article, plus discussion pages, and all tangential material), and see how well that article progressed. I believe, also, that you will find Ann Teedham's suggestions in the Margaret Murie review good guidelines to follow. Mae Sendikson (talk) 14:06, 25 January 2009 (UTC)

Thanks for the notes. I have always had trouble with writing the lead, but I was leaving it until I found some more balancing material. Work will be continuing shortly :) » \ / (⁂) 14:30, 25 January 2009 (UTC)

[edit] Pope John Paul II

This article is listed for peer review because it aspiring to be a 'Good Article'. It needs expanding in places but frequent criticism is that it is too long. This needs more opinions. You must bear-in-mind John Paul II was Pope for 27 years. Another criticism is tone of article, serious POV issues and hagiography. It is also suffering from undue weight and "synthesis of sourced". Prose sometimes wanders, but rarely flows. Length and tone are probably greatest issues with the fact that it is triffle "rigid". Needs improvement EtonLibrarian (talk) 19:28, 21 January 2009 (UTC)

[edit] Christa McAuliffe

I've never gotten a biography to GA-status, and I'm hoping to eventually reach that point for this article. I'm especially concerned with how to handle Christa_McAuliffe#Legacy. I've already reduced the Legacy section and I've tried to fully reference the article and add more relevant context about what she was like as a teacher, what she was going to do in space, and the circumstances/coverage of her death. --Jh12 (talk) 17:05, 21 January 2009 (UTC)

[edit] Jada Pinkett Smith

This article underwent a peer review in late December 2008. It was recently an FAC but was not promoted. A copyeditor (JamieS93) was kind enough to fix some minor prose and MoS issues during the past week. I have no idea what else to do with this article and how to get it to FA status. Any suggestions would be extremely helpful. Thank you so much. – Ms. Sarita ^Confer 23:52, 20 January 2009 (UTC)

[go to JPS talkpage]--Anne Teedham (talk) 17:38, 25 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments from Scartol

I'm really sorry it's taken me so long to get to this review and copyedit. Let me start by saying Nice Work. The level of research and depth here is impressive. I've polished the prose as much as I can, so hopefully you'll have more success at the next FAC. I recommend getting the other folks who voted against it last time to have a look before you re-nominate it.

Here are some thoughts and comments I had while reading. You may incorporate or ignore them as you please.

Early life

• I've retitled this section to indicate that it includes discussion of family in general. I disagree with the comment on the article talk page that the focus is confusing; most biography articles start with a discussion of the parents.

• Pinkett Smith majored in dance and theatre at the Baltimore School for the Arts, graduating in 1989. Can we specify which degree she earned?

• I'm not a fan of quote boxes. How about a locator map of Baltimore instead?

Acting career

• I switched "rave reviews" to "positive reviews". I worry that "rave" is not neutral.

• With regard to images: The subject of your article isn't the only possibility for images. For example, I added a pic of Queen Latifah to the section about Set It Off. You can find images of people and events and places related to the article (scanning the hyperlinks is a good way to get ideas), and then add those. Be sure to make clear in the caption what the image subject's relationship is/was to the subject of the article. (I've added some others, too. Feel free to change or remove any of these.)

• She subsequently landed a role in the film If These Walls Could Talk (1996), as Patti. Give one less-than-a-sentence description of who Patti is in the movie.

• The sudden appearance of Will Smith as her husband in the final subsection of this part is confusing. I recommend adding a sentence to the first subsection (in the part about her earliest auditions) which mentions that she met Will Smith and married him in 1997.

• I notice that most acting descriptions are in the past tense ("...played the supporting role of Sonji Roi..."), but then suddenly we had one in the present tense ("Pinkett Smith plays Janeane Johnson..."). I fixed this, but you should go through the article and see if there are other tense-switches.

• Because this is a biography of a living person who is constantly acting and developing new material, you will have to be vigilant about updates to the article. When it becomes an FA, you (and other editors) will need to be careful that updates don't interfere with the quality of the writing.

Musical career

• I agree with the earlier review (I can't remember where it was) that we need to pick one classification of Wicked Wisdom, and stick with it. If "metal rock" is the chosen category, fine. Go through and make sure it isn't described in some other way at any point. (I've tried to do this, but I wanted to see if you had a different phrase to use, and you should check it yourself as well.)

• "Stated" is usually not a very effective a word for attributing quotations. I much prefer keeping it simple with "said".

Marriage and children

• I retitled this section partly to avoid confusion with the earlier Family section, and partly because "Relationships" seemed like an odd way to describe her marriage. (It made me think there would be info about other people she'd dated.)

Charity work and politics

• The connection between Pinkett Smith and Meg Ryan isn't clear with regard to Sarah Palin. Either explain why Ryan's being mentioned here, or just leave her out of it.

• I vote for removing the info about Obama being elected; it doesn't really belong in this article. (If you really feel like the last part of that sentence needs a mention, work it into the first part of that paragraph.)

Other

• That's a pretty extensive "selected" filmography! I recommend limiting it to 12 or so movies.

• I don't know that the "Other notes" column is important. Most of that info is in the article text, so I recommend removing it.

• My understanding (from working on Barton Fink) is that the IMDB isn't a reliable source for info about movies. (It's used here for the awards table.) I can't recommend a better source, but you could go to each of the awards' websites and citing those.

• Do we really need a link to the website of the New Village Leadership Academy? I'd vote to remove that one, since it's only tangentially related to her.

Again: Well done on the work so far, and I believe that this article will soon be graced with a well-deserved bronze star. If you have any questions, please let me know. Good luck! Scartol • Tok 18:26, 31 January 2009 (UTC)

[edit] Pin Malakul

I have so far been the sole contributor to the content of this article. Waiting for an assessment has proved to be a test of patience, but I believe that with the recent expansion the article should be able to pass the B class criteria. Would like to know what others think of the article and its chances, and suggestions for improvement would be greatly appreciated. Thank you. --Paul_012 ^(talk) 00:36, 16 November 2008 (UTC)

Update: The article has passed GA review. I would like to hear suggestions on further improving the article. Thank you. --Paul_012 ^(talk) 20:44, 22 December 2008 (UTC)

[edit] John Pitcairn, Jr.

This is my first 'from scratch' biography. Of course I'd love to see it become a FA, but I'd be quite happy with a GA. Basically, I would like some general feedback about the structure and level of detail, and to have pointed out any obvious bio-format errors I may have made.

Also, I really don't know what level of priority the subject merits - he was clearly one of the major entrepreneur/industrialists of the US (created a F500 company), but is far less known today than many others.

Thanks in advance! --wormcast (talk) 02:55, 10 November 2008 (UTC)

See HERE Anne Teedham (talk) 19:47, 17 November 2008 (UTC)

[edit] Dwight Lauderdale

I'm submitting this article for peer-review. Basically, it's the second article I've written, and because it's about a living person (and I tend to write somewhat "flowery". ) I want to make sure this article meets wiki's standards. (It's definetly got references!! ). Feel free to leave a note about what got changed over there. Thank you ! KoshVorlon > rm -r WP:F.U.R 23:01, 9 November 2008 (UTC)

[edit] Ramakrishna

Several corrections, additions, improvements have been made to the article over past 2 months, I think this article can at least become a good article., but before this assessment, a peer review will be very helpful. Thanks. — Nvineeth ^talk 09:04, 4 October 2008 (UTC)

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